英语四级8分作文修改1

2012-11-22 00:00:00 · 作者:编辑部  
英语四级8分作文修改

   英语四级待批改作文:
  In everyday life,we will come across various things and people.There is no doubt that most of them are good,but in some cases,we will see some immoral behaviors.

  A few days ago,when I was in a bus to a supermarket,there was a girl who was eating something.And when she finished,she threw the packing bag out of window.I was shocked of her behavior.The packing bag would not only pollute the environment but also cause danger to the cars passing that road.

  However,this is just one of my experience.In fact,there are lots of immoral behaviors in our daily life which have some bad effects.Firstly,it will make us unpleasant.Moreover,it will either pollute the environment or disturb the order of society.

  If we want to improve this condition,we can appeal people not to do the immoral things and put some signs in the public area.Most importantly,we shouid remember that it is every indivisual's duty to make our society better and better.

  作文批改如下:

  In everyday life, we will come across various things and people. There is no doubt that most of them are good, but in some cases, we will see some immoral behaviors.
  {A few days ago, when I was in a bus to a supermarket, there was a girl who was eating something. And when she finished, she threw the packing bag out of window. I was shocked of(改为at) her behavior. The packing bag would not only pollute the environment but also cause danger to the cars passing that road}(不要单分段,应该写在第一段内)
   However, this is just one of my experience(加s. In fact, there are lots of immoral behaviors in our daily life which have some bad effects. Firstly, it will make us unpleasant .Moreover, it will either pollute the environment or disturb the order of society. (either …or…是或者或者的意思)
If we want to improve this condition, we can appeal people not to do the immoral things and put some signs(改为signals in the public area. Most importantly, we shouid(拼写错误,改为should remember that it is every indivisual's(拼写错误,改为individual’s) duty to make our society better and better.
同学你好,标点符号要与后面的单词空一格。要严格按照题目要求,分段,四六级文章都是三段式。

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